I have discovered I am not submissive, due to Emily's very fleshed out personality and control making me noticeably pissed off. I suppose that's good dialogue and character writing at play. Great job but apparently not being in control is something I have trouble handling.
I really fell in love with this game last year when I downloaded it but I’m sad to still see no updates— I hope that you(aquaworshiper) are doing well and haven’t gotten under too much stress or an even worse ailment. If I had to leave any suggestion, please add more SPH content, because that’s really great. Love the game, and I hope to see more work done on it whenever possible.
i absolutely love the idea for this game! and i absolutely hope that we are gonna see some more spades in this game! that was definetely the hottest part for me, keep up the good work man!
i love that you can kiss one of the girls and as they are walking away she says she just finished sucking of some other man can you add more of the plz
I liked the desdription, and think the premise is fun, but I'm sorry... I realize that English is almost certainly not your first language, but please get a proofreader! The sentence structures and chosen words, even spelling are so jarring, I had to stop and deleted the game after 10 minutes...
Yep, it's not my native language. I already have a proofreader, but he is not changed everything yet. Thanks for comment, hope you will enjoy this game in future~
Please let us know in a future update when it's done (the grammatical and syntactical corrections) and then I will *definitely* want to try this again!
Like I said, I like the premise, so it's definitely worth a second chance!
The hat thanks you for your reply! Or it would if it could speak.
It cannot, so instead it... sits there and... does hat things.
It also somehow passes along a few pieces of advice, mainly about optimizing filesize. Setting the RenPy build to archive images saves on space. Also you can save a lot of your scene images in the .jpg format to further reduce filesize with no major loss to quality.
Because 1920x1080 PNG images are going to bloat your filesize to Godzilla proportions...
Okay so, Upon reading "Splif's" comment, I decided to give this game a go and give you some advice that might actually help if you wish to continue going forward...
Firstly, something I'd try to get around to is re going through the text's that the characters speak again and slowly, Sadly there was quite a few times that I needed to figure out what they meant to say, I'll give a few examples. "She is typing something while you wait her" "She is typing up something while you wait for her to finish" Or "____ _____ ? My name is Jane Strife, I hope we get it over quickly" "____ _____ ? My name is Jane Strife, I hope we get this over quickly" Final one I promise "I think some girls think what I stalk them to their houses" "I think some girls think that I stalk them to their houses" However, I believe it might be better written like so: "I think some girls have the misconception that I stalk them to their houses"
I think you get the point.
There are a few points that I'd like to go over but I don't know the text limit I'm afraid. I don't mean to go on either, I used to ask friends for advice when I used to write stories in my spare time, So I hope I could be at least a little helpful :)
Pretty bad, thanks for asking. But yeah, you can play my game without pay, but if someone likes my game and wants to sponsor me, I am open to suggestions. Thats how it work for me~
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I have discovered I am not submissive, due to Emily's very fleshed out personality and control making me noticeably pissed off. I suppose that's good dialogue and character writing at play. Great job but apparently not being in control is something I have trouble handling.
I really fell in love with this game last year when I downloaded it but I’m sad to still see no updates— I hope that you(aquaworshiper) are doing well and haven’t gotten under too much stress or an even worse ailment. If I had to leave any suggestion, please add more SPH content, because that’s really great. Love the game, and I hope to see more work done on it whenever possible.
Any more updates planned for this game?
oh and as a side note, it would be nice to see some blur censoring isntead of a black box, i hope a choice for that can be added in the future
i absolutely love the idea for this game! and i absolutely hope that we are gonna see some more spades in this game! that was definetely the hottest part for me, keep up the good work man!
loving this, keep it up
im loving the ntr parts with the trios
i love that you can kiss one of the girls and as they are walking away she says she just finished sucking of some other man can you add more of the plz
Is there a list of routs and requirements? i'm SURE that I miss a bunch of content :D
Dont know what all the comments complaining about the English being bad. Its a bit wordy sometimes but i never struggled to read it or anytihng
I liked the desdription, and think the premise is fun, but I'm sorry... I realize that English is almost certainly not your first language, but please get a proofreader!
The sentence structures and chosen words, even spelling are so jarring, I had to stop and deleted the game after 10 minutes...
Yep, it's not my native language. I already have a proofreader, but he is not changed everything yet. Thanks for comment, hope you will enjoy this game in future~
Please let us know in a future update when it's done (the grammatical and syntactical corrections) and then I will *definitely* want to try this again!
Like I said, I like the premise, so it's definitely worth a second chance!
Awesome game. So, is there any shortcut to a teacher's writing, since it's not a full game yet?
Write "Praise Aqua"
awesome game! looking forward the future content
Looking forward to Next Versions. Keep it up! [BTW Love the way you think]
Wdym? About way of thinking?
Just when i think the game dev won't add some f*cked up sh*t i like , you already added it with perfection !
Oh, ok, thanks •^•
where would you like bug reports
Welcome to my Discord, pal~
This was very interesting experience and I had plenty of fun with 0.3 version. Can't wait for more :)
The purple hat is curious to know what rendering program you're using, as it looks pretty good.
I'm using Koikatsu party for pics~
The hat thanks you for your reply! Or it would if it could speak.
It cannot, so instead it... sits there and... does hat things.
It also somehow passes along a few pieces of advice, mainly about optimizing filesize. Setting the RenPy build to archive images saves on space. Also you can save a lot of your scene images in the .jpg format to further reduce filesize with no major loss to quality.
Because 1920x1080 PNG images are going to bloat your filesize to Godzilla proportions...
definitely keeping an eye on this game, the premis is realy hot. The scene with the nurse is awesome, I would like to see more of a follow up on it!
I'll keep my eye on this game
Okay so, Upon reading "Splif's" comment, I decided to give this game a go and give you some advice that might actually help if you wish to continue going forward...
Firstly, something I'd try to get around to is re going through the text's that the characters speak again and slowly, Sadly there was quite a few times that I needed to figure out what they meant to say, I'll give a few examples.
"She is typing something while you wait her"
"She is typing up something while you wait for her to finish"
Or
"____ _____ ? My name is Jane Strife, I hope we get it over quickly"
"____ _____ ? My name is Jane Strife, I hope we get this over quickly"
Final one I promise
"I think some girls think what I stalk them to their houses"
"I think some girls think that I stalk them to their houses"
However, I believe it might be better written like so:
"I think some girls have the misconception that I stalk them to their houses"
I think you get the point.
There are a few points that I'd like to go over but I don't know the text limit I'm afraid.
I don't mean to go on either, I used to ask friends for advice when I used to write stories in my spare time, So I hope I could be at least a little helpful :)
Thanks for the help with that! I will rewrite it, I just kinda suck in english~
Well, if I'm free, I'm more than happy to go over things. I'm not as good as most, and suck at grammar but I can definitely help if need be. :)
Can you DM me on Discord, if possible?
Ignore that Splif guy below, keep doing your best okay :D
Thanks for kind words~
one of the most boring and useless game i ve tried on itch.....really u spend time for create this...???i recommend you to change job man...
Making games for itch is not a job, dummy~
but u ask money for this....how do u sleep at night??if u know what i mean...
Pretty bad, thanks for asking. But yeah, you can play my game without pay, but if someone likes my game and wants to sponsor me, I am open to suggestions. Thats how it work for me~
It's litterally free buddy...